The 1st place winner for CHildren Write the Future’s June writing prompts is Katelyn M, a ten year old from Orlando Fl. This descriptive is a great blend of figurative language, powerful vocabulary, and authentic voice that matched her submitted photo perfectly. Katelyn’s writing was so genuine it kept us smiling from beginning to end.
Unbelievably Awesome!!!
“Woooooo!” Man this picture of me is unbelievably awesome. I find this photo to look as shocking as a dog would look on Mars. The picture of me makes the impossible and the unachievable look real. I am going to help you imagine this breath taking, jaw dropping incredible photo so you can experience the same astonishment as me.
First I will describe the background of this picture. A gorgeous calm lake behind me with a small fountain showering the shimmering surface of the navy blue lake. Small ripples spread across it. On the edges of the lake green plants border it in the shallow water bobbing up and down. Some lily pads some long green flowing strips. Up the bank of the lake there is some fairly green grass but some of it is a light brown color.
Also there’s a light gray wide sidewalk with a crack in it. The sky has many puffy clouds like marshmallows and it is a crystal clear blue day.
Next I will describe what I’m doing and looking like. Upside down doing a stupendous handstand on the edge of my lightweight, speedy, radical, Element (a skate company) skateboard. My feet are almost symetrical with eachother. My shirt slightly coming down just enough to show a tiny patch of my ghost white stomach. Black kneepads with four orange dots are wrapped around my legs and one of the kneepads straps is crooked. With a navy blue shirt on and black pants two elbow pads that look a lot like the knee pads plus gloves, also a helmet I realize that I have just defied gravity and started a new level of extreme.
Lastly I will describe my expression in the photo. A wide open mouth with a pink tongue slightly hanging out of it touching the helmet’s strap, and eyes as wide as bowling balls are upon my face. Looking as if I’m the first person to ever walk on the moon I stare excitedly into the camera’s lens. My face was bright red from exhaustion and playing so hard. I was looking like I was going to burst from astonishment struggling to keep my balance.
I know I enjoyed this photo; I hope you did too. It is quite a dazzling sight when you imagine it correctly. Well I have to go get my skateboard. Mom is waiting to take another picture.